Losing control

Here's an attempt at how one of the major scenes planned for my comic might pan out. A girl arrives on the scene and becomes an obsessive focus for the protagonist, whilst also making his imaginary world spin out of control. This event triggers the main drive of the narrative, causing our hero to struggle with his inner feelings and as a result attempt to claw out of his imaginary world.
I'm not sure how successful the above pages are. I'm a little embarrassed by some of the dialogue but hopefully this can be refined. The bottom page depicts the antagonist of the story rocking up to tease our hero. I'm still uncertain about whether he should be a co-worker or perhaps another library user...hmm.